Sunday, July 3, 2011

The Children's Museum (Jay's account)

we walk to the train and we went to see molly and this guy was yelling titi took the wrong train we took four trains to see molly (at) the chanden (Children's) museum the girls was spent (spitting) on top on the clamp (climbing) thing then we went to the bule (bubble) room and the golf room it was so fun and we had Ice cream we walk bach (back) home with ben faimly and we took a water taxis to meet ben and he gave me a Ipod.


***I pulled teeth for this entry. Seriously. But we're editing all of these tonight because he knows to capitalize proper nouns and I've explained what that is and he knows to capitalize at the beginning of sentences. Even if he doesn't always know when the sentence ends and a new thought begins, the very first letter of this paragraph should have been capitalized. I think when he reads it on the blog and see the lack of punctuation he'll be more agreeable to improving his writing. Anyone who's reading, leave comments and suggest that he continue to work hard. He has fallen in love with Harvard -- so let's push him to get there!***

1 comment:

  1. It looks like you're working hard on these posts Jay! It'll get easier the more you do it. Keep up the good work buddy!